Sunday, August 26, 2012

Better Left Unsaid - A snip here and there.

Hello! This week on the TTC/MasterKoda Virtual Blog Tour we are discussing some of our deleted scenes. Today my guest is Penelope Price, and she shares with us a deleted scene from her story Incandescence.

Better Left Unsaid
by Penelope Price

In every book, some edits must occur. Some words must be struck from the page with prejudice. They must be smited righteously to tighten the prose and make that novel sing! *ahem* Sorry, I get carried away when I'm in the throes of editing -- as I am today -- and I just can't help myself.

Anyway - its true. Snips happen. A word here, a paragraph there. Streamlining and refining.

In editing "Incandescence" I found that while sprinting during <a href="">NaNoWriMo</a> is excellent for word count and just getting the story out, sometimes it makes for redundancy. And redundancy is death to taut prose.

Mostly, fixing those repetitive bits just required little snips. Switching around so dialogue so characters don't mention the same story twice or the like. I did not have to eighty-six anything major, and certainly nothing I loved.

But there was one large scene that had to be deleted and of course it was one I really enjoyed writing and wished I could have kept in. It was a very PG romance scene -- not erotic, not exactly sexual -- between one of the main characters (15 year-old Hannah) and a young man who has been pining for her since the moment they met (18-year-old Luke).

You see, Luke is a good guy with a bit of a possessive streak and a slight blind spot to how dire their circumstances are as survivors of 'the end of the world'. He falls hard for the, admittedly, sort of weird, but spunky and funny (and magic!) redheaded teen. Patience is a virtue he possesses in great quantity, and even when he's initially rebuffed romantically, Luke pursues her friendship.

And he wins it. They become close despite having grown-up in two very different environments and being a few years apart in age. But Luke is not alone in his affections for Hannah. The antagonist, Alexander, also wants Hannah, though his motivations are vastly different and somewhat nefarious.

The deleted scene, a tender first kiss and a little bit of background exposition, between Luke and Hannah just doesn't belong. It did not make sense for the plucky magess who has been mentally tortmented for months and whose physical changes are making her withdraw from all the people around her, to suddenly being having a romantic exchange with her best friend.

So the kiss hit the cutting room floor and the hint of potential romance with it. By the end of "Incandescence", it was obvious that there just wasn't a place for that sort of scene in the book. Too many other things were happening in the race to the climactic scene and smooching just has to wait.

Darn it.

Ah! But there is hope for the burgeoning relationship in the sequel. If poor, traumatized Hannah can get herself together, there is a really great guy waiting to wrap her in his arms and love her through it. And if she can't, well, time will tell if Luke's the kind to pine away or move on. Options may be limited at the end of the world, but there are still other fish in the seas.

I hear great-great-granmama Torovaldi is single. *wink*

Love & Rainbows,

Penelope Price: author, gamer, nerd. Though she has been writing since she learned to read, P.P. did not emerge from her coccoon to join the writing circuit until the year of Tangerine Tango. She is the crazy chick behind this summer's Incandescence and its sequel, Inferno and can usually be found plotting projects with her partner-in-crime, Jack Morgan of Get updates, gossip and geekery by following P.P. on Facebook (, Twitter (!/PP_TheWriter), and at her blog (

Sunday, August 19, 2012

Jennifer Don and Poetry and other things too...

Interview with Jennifer Don for the TTC Virtual Blog Tour.
Jennifer Don has a great online presence, I enjoy her posts and she is always a lot of fun. So I was excited that I got to interview her, and learn a little more about her.

I know you write poems, I've read some and they are lovely. Can you share a short one here?

Jennifer: Yes, of course I can. It’s been some time however since I’ve written a poem that I’ve actually kept hold of. The one I’m going to share will be familiar to a small group of writers that participate in writing sprints.

The Call of Arms,

Any writers ready to write, any sprinters ready to sprint?
A calling of arms is upon you now,
so steady the bearing and lay down your foundations.
Call upon that elusive muse,
and send him forth into a world of mystery.
Steady now that quivering quill,
and watch as the ink will bleed your love.
Now off to war with you, with a world of words.
Fly the flag, the banner, and tell the world the writers are coming.

Jennifer Don © 2011

  1. HHow do you write a poem? By that I mean what inspires it?

Jennifer: That’s a very good question. To write a poem is to start understanding the internal feels. It is about watching and exploring the world around you and then twist it into the magic we all poetry. Life inspires me. Often though, the smallest of triggers will produce a swarm of words that move in a way that you just know you need to write down, and from there – the poem begins.

  1. HHow long have you been writing?
Jennifer: Well there are technically two answers to this question. I’ve been writing poetry on and off since April 2008. During which time, I’ve experienced so many highs and lows that some are very obvious as to how I felt at the time of writing; others hide more than they show.
I’ve been writing with novels in mind since January 2011, so the whole journey is new to me and each day brings a new experience and a new challenge to face.

  1. AAre you published? 
Jennifer: I’m not currently published, but I certainly hope to be in the near future. I’m working on a project that I hope to release sometime in the early months next year, but at the rate it’s going I could be looking more towards summertime 2013.

  1. DDo you write anything other than poems?
Jennifer:  In fact I do. I write short stories when the inspiration flows and I’ve written one completed first draft of a 122k novel. I’m currently aiming to finish another novel and planning is underway for a third. With all that said though, the editing is the hardest part of writing. But the arduous labour and intense love of writing keeps you moving.

  1. WWhere do you do all of your writing?
Jennifer: Wherever the moment strikes you will find me hunched over with a pen in my hand and a notebook in my lap. Be it at the beach, in the back, at work or at home. Pen and paper are never far away so that any idea’s that spring to mind are duly noted and stored, having said that, the bulk of my writing is done in my cave (room to everyone else).

  1. WWhat are your non-writing hobbies?
Jennifer: When not writing I can be found walking my beloved border collies, or still with a pencil in my hand yet focused intently on the artistic side of my abilities. When that fails me, I am often found curled up in corners, under covers, or on the floor with a book or my kindle in hand. Down time is the best time!

  1. WWhat’s your favorite genre to read?
Jennifer: Ah, you know I don’t think I have a favourite genre to read. I’m so open that I can read just about anything and be comfortably satisfied with them, Paranormal and Young Adult will always hold a place in my heart but separating them from Horror and Mystery would be very difficult.

  1. WWhat are your favorite kinds of movies to watch?
Jennifer: Again this would be very hard to answer with just one type. I love Action and Thrillers, but also enjoy Comedy and Music orientated films. Horrors hold a special place in my heart but when you see my movie collection you’ll be hard pressed to say which category I favour most.

  1. FFavorite flavor of ice cream?
Jennifer: For a while as a child, it used to be Vanilla. Over the years it then changed to Strawberry but now it has to be Mint Choc Chip!

  1. What can you not leave your home without?
Jennifer: My Inhaler, for medical reasons obviously… oh wait this question is based on something else… Let’s see… I never leave home without a pen in my pocket or a notebook in my back. Oh don’t forget the kindle or iPad; I always take one of those with me too.

  1. HHow do you feel about the dentist?
Jennifer: Ah, yeah I don’t like them. In fact I would step so far as to say, I am terrified of them but recently I’ve had to step into the dark side of fear and face it head on.

  1. SShare with us three things that your Facebook friends don’t know about you:
Jennifer:  Now this is hard, as I have different circles of friends all on the one page. To some, they don’t know I read Tarot Cards and work with a psychic development site (free of charge naturally) where I am also an assistant manager. Some don’t know that I’m a writer even though many should by now; it still amazes some when they see it posted. Oh, and I can roll my tongue… does that count? Do we have three now because my head is frazzled? 

Yes, Jennifer, that would be three LOL. And this is the close of our time together. Thank you so much for participating today! =)

Bio & Links:
About Jennifer Don

Jennifer spent many years without daring to lift a pen, without writing a word that wasn’t forced. But 2008 arrived and with it, her love of writing. She began with poetry which quenched her thirst to begin with but soon that wasn’t enough to satisfy her. 2011 arrived with a dream to write her first novel – Awakening, which is on-going. November saw her attempt her first NaNoWriMo, and so Timber Varden was born, with the bulk of it being written within that month. Now she finds herself aiming to re-write that draft and turn it into her first published novel.

While she aims to work through the edits needed, updates on her progress can be found on here -
To find out more with regards to her other projects, then check out her blog here -
And should you wish to follow her on Twitter, or ask her any questions please see here -!/Voice_Of_Spirit
You can also add and follow Jennifer over on Goodreads. You will find that link here –
Jennifer will be more than happy to answer any questions you have for her. You can contact her at any of the links posted above. Or email her at


Saturday, August 18, 2012

Avoid the Corners

I'd like to say thank you to Scott Seldon for guesting on my page today! Scott's been here before and I welcome him back! Without further ado...

Avoid the Corners

As a writer of a series, I like to look at others mistakes to see what I can learn. Even the greatest of writers can write themselves into a corner and not be able to see the way out. I very much want to avoid doing that to myself, so I look and learn.

Author Scott Seldon
There are times of year that I can really get into the groove and times that nothing seems to happen. August has always been a dead month (partly do to my non-writerly job that pays the bills) so this year I decided to make the most of it. I haven’t even opened my current project to even try and write. Instead I have been reading in an attempt to get my creative energies flowing so when August is over I can resume writing. The object of my reading is Isaac Asimov’s Foundation Trilogy. And yes, I know it is more than a trilogy, but it is that trilogy as a complete unit before Asimov added to it in the 80’s, that I wanted to read. However it is the series as a whole I’ll be addressing.

Asimov had a wonderful concept. One problem, it was setup so that his protagonists always won. That only carried him so far. Then he introduced a foil, The Mule. But again, that only carried him so far. He pitted the Mule against the Second Foundation and then the two foundations against each other. Basically he kept writing himself into a corner and struggled to find a way out. In the end, he did it one more time when he introduced Gaia and their plan for Galaxia. He never did figure out how to get out of that one.

We have a saying at work, “when you find yourself in a hole, stop digging.” That is so applicable to writing. When you find yourself writing into a corner, you really need to find a way out that doesn’t lead to a bigger corner. If a great writer like Asimov can do it, what is to stop any of us from finding ourselves in that place. I think I found the answer.

To avoid the corners you have to be looking at the bigger picture. You need to know where you are going to steer clear of the corners that will stop you cold. Asimov, for all his planning of each story, didn’t start out the Foundation stories planning to write the entire story. It was an idea for a single story that led to sequels. I don’t think he ever envisioned what it became. That is the secret, to envision the broader picture. Even if you never plan on doing it, having that broader picture in mind is a must.

Yes, you may be writing a short story or a stand alone novel, but what if you want more? Take a few minutes, think of the big picture and ways to continue the story. You many never use them, but thinking of them up front will keep you out of the corner and keep your story moving if you chose to continue it.

Scott Seldon lives with his family in Colorado and works as an IT administrator. Visit his website (  for the latest updates and to find where his books are sold. Watch for his upcoming novel, Pirates of I’ab, at your favorite ebook retailer.

Tuesday, August 7, 2012

Young Adult Giveaway Hop

Announcing the 
Young Adult Giveaway Hop

August 8th to 14th

My daughter just cleaned out her room! I mean really cleaned it, and she even had some neighborhood girls come help. Yes, it was that bad! I was tired of telling her to clean her room all the time, and I tried the "It's your room, I don't care" approach, and things got ugly quick. I'm over that stage, but in the meantime, she sorted through her bookshelf. She has a few books she doesn't want anymore, and I like to recycle! So I will list a few here, and the winner of this giveaway will get to choose one book they'd like from the list (I promise they are all in good shape!). I will also send the winner, if they'd like, a copy of my eBook, The Keeper (a young adult paranormal romance). Click The Keeper at Amazon for more info on that.

Books to choose from:

  • Tantalize by Cynthia Leitich Smith
  • Breathe a ghost story by Cliff McNish
  • Willow by Julia Hoban
  • Deadly Little Secret by Laurie Faria Stolarz
  • The Romeo And Juliet Code by Phoebe Stone
  • Lock and Key by Sarah Dessen

To enter the giveaway fill out the rafflecopter form below! Don't forget to visit the other sites in the hop, there are 200+ links for chances to win something! Good Luck! =)

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Saturday, August 4, 2012

A Fleeting Glance of Digitus 233, by K.D. Emerson

I am very pleased to announce my spotlight author for this weeks virtual blog tour is none other than K.D. Emerson! I met this special lady one day when she posted on a facebook group. She was looking for guests to appear on her blog talk radio show. I contacted her, had a wonderful visit on blog talk, and became a member of the MasterKoda facebook page that she oversees. She's helped so many people, and runs a great no nonsense group of aspiring people (mostly authors). Kim is such a kind-hearted person, and I hope to meet her one day to hug her senseless with a big huge bear hug. Without further ado... Here's Kim and some never before seen snippets from her upcoming novel...

After much argument from the main characters of the book it was finally decided to give a fleeting glance inside the upcoming novel Digitus 233 from author K.D. Emerson.

Deep within the dark abyss of his own mind, Zander tried to shout, but no sound escaped. It felt as though a heavy mallet beat against his skull. Pushing the pain to the back of his mind, he forced himself to focus and slithered through the murk toward a pinpoint of light. Gulping for air, he burst through the blackness and forced his eyes open.
A scream escaped before he could stop himself. Inches away, a face; a set of open blue eyes stared at him. Was it a dead body? He struggled with his arms and legs, but couldn’t force them to move. The eyes in front of him blinked. This time he caught the scream half way up and swallowed it. He had to get control of himself.
            He fought against the pounding in his head. Where was he? What was going on? His eyes darted from side to side. The ceiling was ice, the floor was ice. And in front of him lay a blue eyed body gagged and bound up in some kind of slippery fabric-cocoon…

“Enough! We have wasted enough time. Crying is not going to get us out of here. Get over it and let’s do it. This is where we are and it’s up to us to get out of here. They either - don’t care, don’t know or this was by design. Let’s stop whining and crying and get ON with it! Lana, get that make up kit of yours. Google, get out there and study the sky, figure out where we are. Quinton, after Google is done the two of you get together and figure out how long it will take us to hike out of here. Jackson, you and I are going hunting again. We have to find something to eat and I doubt there is a garden on this ice cube. Remember, we can only depend on ourselves. We are all we have,” Zander bent over and grabbed the make shift spear Jackson had made out of the frame of the airplane seat…

A blood curdling scream ripped through the air. Jackson was on his feet and out of the cave before the rest of them had time to look up. They tore off after him. Zander watched as Jackson crested the rock outcropping and disappeared behind it. He felt his feet beneath him pounding the earth, slipping and slidding, but gaining on Jackson with every stride. In the distance they saw Google backing away from a large white bulk.
Polar bear!


Without a word Jackson followed the two suits out the door. Had he passed the test? Would he be allowed to live? Or were they taking him out in the woods to kill him? He forced himself to move, biting his bottom lip to keep silent. Had he survived losing his family and home just to be shot like a rabid dog? He thought he should make a run for it and waited for a chance. The chance never came. They shuffled him to a van, the door locked tight and he was driven to the outskirts of the city…


Author, KD Emerson was born (or is that hatched) several years ago. We won’t go into how long it has been because she has this fantasy that she is still a teenager off to conquer the world. She has a passion for the written word and assisting other writers in becoming the best they can be. She also loves to promote others and cheer them on to victory. Follow her on twitter @MstrKoda or you can find her at and on Facebook at